Feedback of rough cut from S1-22

We thought that the narrative the was clear Jenny was obviously in peril. The location was good but the change from being in the corridor to going outside was a bit random maybe moving to a classroom instead could've been more effective. you could use more transitions and fades maybe use these when you add credits and a title.the lighting in the corridor was effective with the sun glow through the windows.

You could edit out the green section on final cut express to eliminate sound of the cleaner and you could go over this with the soundtrack. but using the cleaners noise would give you diegetic and non diegetic.

The camera angles were good. the low angle shot of Adam was effective and made him look powerful and in control.